Shmulyan,+Lisa

toc =6/28/2011= Structure blocks better, and tell me where you are putting args (on the impacts...) Good clarity and on signaling when you are moving on Don't put an underview at the bottom. Put overviews at the top. Use that time to extend specific pieces of ev. -(This would have been better in a global overview. The neg didn't really argue on the advantages) -Jumping around at the end... Add more stuff (esp. on the K)

Don't write speeches...

Too little to late... The case args were pretty good, but needed to be in the 2AC AND 1AR -I would let you get away with it (neg dropped it) IF it was in the 2AC at least -Also, you need to explain, not just tagline extend Don't say "we win on." It's just really... something Keep an organization to your speech

=6/29/2011= 1N – Lisa • You are doing a good job of enunciating words, but you need to focus on delivering your speech in a smooth and clear fashion. The number one speaking issue at the moment is pausing in the middle of sentences. The best way to deal with this issue is to do a drill where you take a breath at the end of every period as you read evidence. After a while, your breathing will even out and become more natural as you read. • Your clarity and smooth delivery got SIGNIFICANTLY better between the beginning and end of the 1NC. Keep working on a consistent delivery. • You have a whole 2:20 left at the end of your 1NC! Always bring up more cards than you will be able to read in your speech. • Indicting an author as a politician doesn’t necessarily indict the evidence. If you tie the CONTENT of the evidence to the authors qualifications, you will be much better off (in this case, the card cites “democratic capitalism”, which is a highly questionable claim to come from a politician) • Good job extending the claims and making root cause arguments. Be careful that you don’t overreach and say that capital is the root cause of everything, though. If you more carefully target their arguments and tie them to capitalism you argument will seem less specious. • The inevitability argument doesn’t really mesh with the way you’re explaining your alternative. Yes, capitalism will inevitably collapse, which means the reason you should do the alternative is to create a peaceful transition instead of a chaotic, disordered and violent breakdown of capitalism.

-Talon

=6/30/2011= Round 3 - Ben and Julian vs. Lisa and Manoj Lisa - 1N

Delivery - I think you have an amazing speaking style. You are super clear and loud, with a wicked charisma, even while reading evidence so bravo. Use your speed to your advantage especially in the 1NC. I know you have a limited set of evidence right now, but really crank it out to your advantage. The only time I feel like your style falters is during cross-x. I don't know if you got swept up by the intenseness of the round or otherwise, but you were a little defensive in cross x. The best thing to do is maintain a detached sass to effectively answer questions and maintain your confidence without looking aggressive. Content - I thought your speech went really well, but I don't think the block was split up very well. It started in the 1NC with your "2 off, case, the 2 off" roadmap. This is always going to set you up for a stretched out speech. Either you're not going to get to all of the offense you planned on, or your case analysis will be rushed and ineffective because you're trying to get to the last DA. Either commit to putting case first or last. This allows you to have control of the round and the offense from the beginning. When you and Manoj split up the block, I don't think it was to your full advantage. WIth your knowledge and speaking style you should be able to crank out a wicked 1NR, crammed with tooth kicking offense and analysis. You can do it grrrrl! Cap K - I think that camp is the perfect time to try out new arguments, especially if you're unfamiliar with them and want to try and run them during the season. I would work on your understand of the levels of a critique. Once you understand the individual levels (Link, Impact, Alt) you can begin to understand how they all interact. This makes explaining them way easier and allows you to focus on the more offensive elements of the position instead of being super defensive. Also, the theory will come later, but don't be overwhelmed by theory. Pick it apart in cross-x and you'll figure out what the voters are and how to proceed from there.

= 7/1/2011 = The 2AC had excellent time allocation, use of analytics, and combination of offense and defense. Excellent case outweighs analysis on the case flow. You only need to change three things: First, make the case outweighs arguments first, because your aff impacts is the most important thing in the round. Second, your speech was wonderful until you had 3 minutes left, and then you started repeating yourself. Don’t do that! If you don’t have more cards, just sit down! If you keep repeating yourself but don’t make new arguments, it just gives the other team more time to prep. Also, you needed to answer all of the negative arguments on case – you dropped all of them.

You are a very fluid speaker and a good arguer, but I think you need to work on some basic technical debate skills. For example, you extended a lot of arguments in your 2AR which your partner did not extend in the 1AR – no bueno. In your 2AR, it also would have been better to do impact analysis right away. You did good impact analysis eventually, but impact analysis is usually at the top of the 2AR because it is often what loses or wins a team the debate round.

=7/3/2011=

You should know the order of the speech you are giving. Perm do both suffices. I don’t need an explanation of it. Better line by line on the case. If manoj has a better flow then he can prepare your case 2AC if you need to balance your prep time. If they say they are fiating their alternative, they don’t have alt solvency. Seems susceptible to an impact turn. Double bind perm? This should be easy to beat. Point out conceded impacts and go for them! Remember, communicate with your partner and make sure some of these arguments are in the 1AR. Good story telling in the 2AR. You are an excellent speaker and will win a lot of debates if you make sure the arguments you want to go for are in your partner’s speech.

Tim